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The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advatages outweigh the dsadvantages?

#media #interaction #people #society #advatages #dsadvantages
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In recent years, social
network
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networks
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become popular all over
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the
 world. With the invention of
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this
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 online communication apps,
people
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 have started to communicate throw them and interact less face-to-face. I believe that the positives,
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 as saving
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 and communicating with distant family, outweigh the drawbacks.
To begin
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from
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 online communication is that
people
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 can conduct business or their
job
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jobs
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 in a more
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time efficient
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 way. When a person is doing an online meeting or a course without having to go out and face the traffic jams, they save a significant amount of
time
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 which can be used in other activities
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 as spending
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 with family
as well as
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 for relaxation.
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, a study
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by The
Quardians
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Guardians
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 Magazine showed that in
the
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recent
years
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years,
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 70% of companies prefer online meetings rather than face-to-face meetings which could be a waste of
time
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 for them.
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, individuals
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opt
 for social sites
such
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 as
facebook
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 and
face
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FaceTime
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time
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app
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apps
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 to do their job and win some extra
time
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 for their families or for their own activities.
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, another reason I believe that the positives are more than the negatives is that it is easier to communicate with
people
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 from
another countries
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 without any effort.
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, companies can choose to employ their employees from another country and offer them their dream job.
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,
people
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 can talk to each other easily with apps
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 as
facebook
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 or
whats app
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WhatsApp
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. As a personal
experience
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experience,
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i
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 used to use
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the facetime
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facetime
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 app to connect with my family when I was studying in Romania.
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, aiming for social media might be
affortless
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effortless
 for many
people
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. In conclusion, though social networks can be a reason for the lack of physical communication, saving
time
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 and
people
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's comfort are more efficient for
day by day
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 life.
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 I believe the benefits to society are stronger than the drawbacks.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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