Some people say that a person’s success is as a result of the way he has been brought up by his parents. Do you agree or disagree?

Now-a-days it is a highly debated topic that weather person's success is because of his
well
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good
upbringing or not. Some people
believes
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believe
that individual growth is
a
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an
outcome of their parents raising. I fully agree with
this
view. Parents moral values impact not only in formative
years but
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years, but
also
whole life
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the whole life
of children.
Furthermore
, a child is like a piece of clay. It can be
molded
shaped to fit by or as if by altering the contours of a pliable mass (as by work or effort)
moulded
into whatever shape. Mother and father insert good values, right culture in the vain of their son and daughter
as a
result they
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result, they
always overcome on bad habits, immoral things.
Similarly
, parents give clear vision of
bright future
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a bright future
through
hardworking
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hard working
and honesty. For instance, Ambani brothers learn painstaking ability from their father Dhirubai Ambani and now
whole world
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the whole world
can see where they are.
On the contrary
, kids raised by parents who have no moral values often get into antisocial activities as they grown up. Especially if you check the background of any criminals either they are orphan
otherwise
grown up by bad parenting.
For example
, the survey conducted in 2004 by CRY
that is
Child Rights and You shows that 85% of lawbreaker teenager from a neglectful family. Beyond
this
, abusive nature of dad or
mom
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mm
stroke child's fragile mind and some time its cause
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of
heavy depression. Every child is a god gifted, always hungry for love and motivation. On balance, it is
universal truth
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a universal truth
that shaping up the future of children in the hand of their parents.They are the
first
and foremost influence on their children and as
such
it is their
responsibilty
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
responsibilities
to ensure that they are guiding them in the right path.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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