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Is it better to teach a child at home or in school? discuss the disadvantages of both topics

#child #home #school #topics
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The argument of whether to teach a child at home or in
school
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 has not been settled yet,
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however it
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however, it
 is very important for children to go to
school
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 because it provides an environment where they can learn a lot of basic skills,
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 as learning alphabets, numbers, and do some simple arithmetic problems.
On the other hand
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, homeschooling your child can help the parents save a lot of money for other important needs,
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, you do not have to spend too much on paying academy fees for your children. It gives you freedom from
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 schedules and how to choose a particular curriculum to teach your child depending on the country where you live. Homeschooling helps you to learn alongside with your children. It makes you share your hobbies and interest with them more than if they were attending
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. Homeschooling gives you freedom from external problems
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 as social peer pressure, bullies and attacks on schools by some militants in the community. Whereas, teaching your children in
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 helps them to develop their talents
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, if they have a particular interest that they want to be really good at, they need a place where it can be harnessed effectively. Schools around the world have clubs that focus on particular hobbies and interest for the student to reach their goals.
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, I strongly agree that teaching your children in
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 is better than homeschooling because it adds more value and skill to their lives. They get to interact with other children, share ideas, and have access to other
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 essentials like music, and sports. It
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 exposes them to different types of people around the world.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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