You have just won two tickets to a concert and want to invite your friend to go with you. Write a letter to your friend. In this letter: Give details about the concert. Describe how you won the tickets. Explain why you have chosen your friend to go with you.

Dear Sam, I hope
this
letter finds you in a radiant of health and great spirits. I am writing
this
letter to inform you that I won two tickets
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a music concert which will be held on 25th of March at Hespeler Village. I am so excited and ecstatic to share the details of
this
concert . Our favourite singer Diljeet Dosanjh will perform and show his talent to the audience and that night is going to be amazing. The show will start around 10 pm and end by 2 am .
Moreover
, I got these tickets through Instagram where I shared the profile of the epic singer to many people
as a result
I was a lucky winner . I
am
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gladly
invited
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you to come with me to a live concert because I love your company as you are a serene and generous person.
Moreover
, as a best friend ,I have
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privilege to spend beautiful and magical moments with you and make
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memorable. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Jai
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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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