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Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these place?

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There is no doubt that museums and institutions play a vital role in cultural and historical value of a country. Given their significance, how to appeal more people to these locations has always been a topic of interest.
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, an unexpected development has been that while museums and historical sites draw the attention of foreign travellers, they are ignored by local people.
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 tendency can be attributed to a host of reasons and there are several viable solutions that can be adopted to boost the number of local visitors to museums and historical attractions. There are two compelling driving factors why people do not visit museums.
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, preconceived notions about
history
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 can directly reduce the attraction of museums. It is traditionally known that
history
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 is rough and tedious,
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 things associated with
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history
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a history
 like museums fail to deliver the attention.
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, the over investment in recreational areas can lead to the substandard infrastructure of historical sites.
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, while the number of malls, entertainment parks surges exponentially, there is a plummet in both quality and quantity of museums. To preclude
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 trend, the government should spend an adequate amount of budget on education. Fertile images, sophisticated teaching methods applied in
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 can be the premise to shape future historical enthusiast. Resulting from that, local people's concerns about museums can be rise surprisingly. To sum up, several rationales for
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 downward tendency in local visitors' attention about museums and historical attractions and education is apparently the optimal solution to remedy
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 divided topic.
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