Inspire of the advances made in agriculture,many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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Despite the fact that there is increase in agricultural development

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a lot of people globally and still hungry.

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is due to insecurity and

humans

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human

activity like

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the felling

of trees that adversely affect the ecosystem.

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, there are solutions to

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. With the rise in social insecurity

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farmers are unable to tend to their crops for fear that they will be killed or or their women raped.

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they are unable to utilise the planting season.

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will adversely affect their harvest and reduce the amount of produce available to the populace.

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, the activities of the

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Fulani

herdsmen in the northern part of Nigeria.

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this

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, man's activity

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as deforestation in order to utilise trees for timber predisposes the land to erosion and flooding.

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will lead to a reduction in the amount of viable land for agricultural purposes and affect produce in the long run. As a solution to these problems

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there should be increased political will to ensure that the lives and properties of the citizens are secured.

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can be done by utilising the security forces to ensure that the activities of the

fulani

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Fulani

herdsmen are eradicated.

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, people should be encouraged to plant trees in order to replace the ones fell and offenders should be prosecuted. Example is the go green initiative where individuals are motivated to plant trees and crops. In conclusion

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the number of hungry people globally is a problem which could be due to political unrest and

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it can be controlled by enhanced security and planting trees to improve agricultural

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productivity

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

259 words

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Inspire of the advances made in agriculture,many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

Fully explain your ideas

With the technological development, some people think technology reduce crime, but some people think it encourage crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree and give your own opinion

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good member of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?