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Creative artists should always have the freedom to express their ideas in any way they wish. The government should not restrict what they do. To what extent do you agree with this opinion.

#artists #freedom #government
The freedom of self should not be given to other
hands even
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hands, even
 if it is the government. We live in
the free
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the freest
 nation where everyone has all rights to express their views, ideas in any way they wish. But, in doing so we have to be in our boundaries and
also
 our expressions should not hurt the
sentimentals
tender, romantic, or nostalgic feeling or emotion
sentiments
 or beliefs of the community and it shouldn't have bad influence on the people. I totally agree with the notion of the government should not restrict how artists show their creative art to the audience. There are plethora of ways one can choose to
demostrate
give an exhibition of to an interested audience
demonstrate
 their work. From the ages, artists have discovered new ways to forward their ideas,
such
 as writings,
peoms
a composition written in metrical feet forming rhythmical lines
poems
, music, dance, facial expressions, drawings and many others. They have chosen them according to their skills so that ideas can be coherent and easily understood. We can't limit or restrict
ones
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one's
 ability to showcase their talent. Many ideas shared have
drastic change
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a drastic change
drastic changes
 in the societies in the good sense.
For example
, Holy books written has influenced
many
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much
 in the way they react, respond and live together to transform better world. In Ayurveda, we have plenty of remedies for various diseases and even it has natural recipes for the most of the incurable and life-taking infirmities.
Also
, many of them have chosen music as one of the best ways to spread awareness and ideas to the whole world. Even now songs of
20th century
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the 20th century
 are popular and people love to
listen
perceive (sound) via the auditory sense
hear
 them. One of the other ways to express is through paintings and drawings with
colorful
having striking color
colourful
 and distinguish imaginations. In conclusion, every creative artists should be given freedom to express their ideas unless it is against the harmony and very existence of human and other creatures including our environment.
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