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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunities abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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In the globalization era,
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world
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the world
 has become a small village, which in results has become easier to access almost anything from every corner of the
world
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 and education is one of the impacted areas.
Now a days
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Nowadays
, students
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have
 access to various institutes throughout the
world
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,
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, they are keen to study in foreign universities for their future benefits, though,
this
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 has its own pros and cons which we will discuss in
this
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 essay. On the one side, most of the pupils
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tend
move
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to move
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into
 western countries after completing their high schools for better development in their career. Studying overseas gives one a good exposure like
engaging
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to engage
 with different cultures and a new perspective of life. Learning from global
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
 opens the door of big firms for them in terms of job and business.
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, students who
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have studied
 from famous global schools are preferred over those who has studied from local institutes.
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, it has its own disadvantages too, Teenagers
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get
 easily influenced by others which may result in derailing from their goals which they set before stepping on foreign land. One the main biggest con is, they easily get involved in illegal activities which as I said ruins their career, because mostly no adult is with them to guide. Another factor is cost of education on
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world level
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a world level
 is way too high as which costs them a fortune;
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, they have to go for student loans, which generally has higher interest rates and repayment of loans again costs them good amount of time and money. In a nutshell, every coin has two sides which
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are
 the same as the case of getting the education, studying
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at
 global level does make a difference to
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a student’s life
the student’s life
 in a positive and negative way.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International job market
  • Cultural exposure
  • Intercultural communication
  • Higher education standards
  • Specialized programs
  • Language proficiency
  • Financial burden
  • Homesickness
  • Mental health challenges
  • Recognition of qualifications
  • Bureaucratic challenges
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