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Many scientific institutes conduct research on live animals. Some people regard it as cruel and unnecessary while others believe it is justified in the interest of human welfare. Discuss the two views and give your reasons. Give reason for your answer.

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It is true that a number of scientific agencies do
research
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 on live
animals
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.
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 it is considered cruel and not important, it has
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 various benefits for human beings ' survival and development. The essay will discuss both views and give justification. Killing
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 or hurting them for analysis and development purposes in medical and science fields has been considered an extremely wrong decision.
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 harm and losses to that generation in the future. By conducting extensive and painful
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 programs, the
animals
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 either die or become weak which impacts their future birth rate.
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, some species become extinct and their reproduction is
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 impacted.
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, during a pandemic, many laboratories experiment on rats to investigate for Corona vaccine.
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this
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, a number of rats died and their growth stopped.
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, It is obvious that after conducting so many trials on live
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, the medicines or vaccines which are developed by agencies have supported human life significantly.
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 is because the medical components in pharma industries can not be used directly on mankind considering negative impacts and threats on life.
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, live
animals
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 are assumed to be the best option. Since people's health, lives and welfare are the priorities of any nation, people believe that there is nothing wrong with
animals
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 being used for any testing or clinical experiment.
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, as per
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 conducted by the University of Japan in the year 2024, more than 50% of medical students have agreed to
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 activities. In conclusion, conducting
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 on live
animals
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 is not favourable
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 adverse effects on
animals
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,
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, it is a requirement for any country for human health and safety.

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task achievement
Try integrating more specific examples and evidence to support your arguments, particularly regarding the benefits of animal testing. For instance, mentioning specific breakthroughs in medical research where animal testing played a crucial role would help strengthen your points.
coherence cohesion
Ensure seamless connections between ideas by making use of linking words and phrases. Phrases like "despite this," or "on the other hand," can significantly enhance the flow of your arguments.
task achievement
The essay successfully discusses both sides of the argument, presenting a balanced view on a controversial topic.
coherence cohesion
Clear introduction and conclusion that effectively set the stage and wrap up the essay.

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