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Many countries think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress as equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Most of the countries’ government
think
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thinks
 that economic developments are most significant aim;
nevertheless
, others opinion that other types of developments are as important as economic developments. In my opinion,
education
 and
health
 services
also
 deserve investment. Ignorant people are very big problem in
this
 contemporary century. They cannot be helpful for anything,
also
, citizens’
level
 of
education
 is
help
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helping
 to determine
country
’s
development
. Educated people are so valuable
for
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to
 improve
to
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with
 countries economy. Government’s should pay
attention
 to their citizens’ educational
level
. Educated people can help to improve their
country
’s
development
 easily. Most effective
way
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ways
 to increase
country
’s
development
 is better financial position.
Therefore
, if people know economic developments how important for their
country
, they can be willing to help their people. The way how people learn
this
 is getting
education
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educated
. That’s
way
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the way
, governments
also
 pay
attention
 to
education
 services. Unhealthy people cannot help to countries’ improvement.
Number
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A number
 of
health
 services, which are hospitals and dentists, and useful equipments can be helpful to identify
this
 countries’
level
 of
development
. So many unhealthy people prevent to tourism.
For instance
, if in a
country
 has a problem about widespread disease, people
be
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are
 reluctant to coming
this
country
. Tourism is so significant factor for economic
development
.
Hence
, if governments want to be a developed
country
, they
also
 should pay
attention
 to their
health
 services. Considering all
this
, it is wise to
attention
country
’s
education
 and
health
services
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service
level
. Because, if
government
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governments
the government
 want to
achieving
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achieve
 their economic aim, they
also
should
give an exhibition of to an interested audience
showed
 interest in their citizens whether they educated and healthy or not.
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