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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the samepark today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Below is the Grange
Park
, a public
park which
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park, which
 was
firstly
 open in 1920 and encountered many changes.
From
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For
 two plans we can see some transformations from 1920 to today,
although
 two entrances remain unchanged. In 1920, the
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 of the
park
 was a fountain and three rose gardens located at the corners. Now a larger square area of rose garden replaced the fountain with seats around it as only another one at the northwest corner was kept. Another significant change is that the stage for musicians was refurbished to
a
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an
 amphitheatre for concerts.
Moreover
, seats around the stage were honed and now round the central rose garden. The east part of
park
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the park
 was received newly design. Rose garden and a pond for water plants were transformed into a cafe and the children's play area, respectively. A previous glasshouse
now become
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has now become
now becomes
is now becoming
 a water feature with an entrance underground car
park
 constructed beside it.
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