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Some people claim that many things that children are taught at school are a waste of time. Other people argue that everything studied at school is useful at some time. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

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It is impossible to find a golden rule of education. Nowadays, one of the most important issues is the teaching of children at
school
. While some people cast doubt on the
school
 curriculum, others believe its benefits. A closer look at both viewpoints will reveal that they are all credible. People who are sceptical about schooling must base on the following concerns. On the one hand, most of the children’s teaching at
school
Suggestion
the school
 focused on rote-learning, which may bring the young to swallow instruction without understanding.
Instead
 of independent thinking and expressing their own opinion, children learn how to pass the test, which only has the short-term benefit and is not useful to their future life.
On the other hand
, given the wild changes of the world, a great amount of useful information can be accessed via the Internet, reading or watching TV. In
this
 case, children can learn more in their fields of interest and do not need to follow the
school
’s teaching pace which does not suit every child.
Such
 means that schooling is not the only or the best way for children’s learning.
Although
 the aforementioned views somewhat dim the prospects of children’s schooling, it still carries some bright sides. Based on the necessity of rote-learning in
school
, even though children do not quite understand some of the instructions and think they are not practical, as they grow up with more life experience, one day they will find the connection of those pieces of information.
Furthermore
, the youths learn not only academic knowledge from
school but
Accept comma addition
school, but
also
 learn social skills and teamwork through getting along with classmates and teachers which cannot gain from studying alone. Children studying at
school
 have both strengths and weaknesses. In my view, it is undoubtedly that schooling is necessary for youths.
However
, to avoid the suspicion of
school
 education, we need to make more effort to optimise the
school
 curriculum.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • comprehensive education
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • social skills
  • well-rounded education
  • outdated curriculum
  • technological advancements
  • job market needs
  • subject relevance
  • career paths
  • diverse skill set
  • knowledge base
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