Some people believed that entertainers are more important than scientists. Do you agree or disagree?

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Most of the individuals considered

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that

entertainment industry

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the entertainment industry

has more importance, rather than explorers.

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, I believe that both have their own value.

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, the entertainment industry has a huge impact on the lives of some people. It plays a vital role in shaping the personality of

few humans

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a few humans

, through fiction stories,

art movies

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art, movies

, non-fiction films, life history of various celebrities. The nature of

job

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jobs

media

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the media

is to entertain people, as

now a days

the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech

nowadays

we are living in the world full of sorrow where we have enormous difficulties.

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, scientists explore and research on the various facts,

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as life of flora and fauna, space exploration, and the discovery of minerals under the land. They present their theories based on the experimentation. Whereas, some of them predict the life of our future.

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, recently, the

space ship

a spacecraft designed to carry a crew into interstellar space (especially in science fiction)

spaceship

has been sent

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the planet Mars to study if the living creatures will be able to survive in the future. Scientists have been immensely working hard, to save our planet Earth. In

this

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case, there are several science fiction films, as well as documentaries, which have been shown by the social media.

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programs are

on aired on the

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aired on the

television, which have a huge impact on our younger generation. To conclude, both are essential in order to reshape our present lives. As the celebrities have an enlarge influence on the people

specially

to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common

especially

adolescents. We are living in the era of technology, which has a crucial role in rebuilding, and shaping up our lifestyle.

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, we

can not

cannot

say that researchers are

overweigh

usually describes a large person who is fat but has a large frame to carry it

overweight

. Whereas, scientific researchers are

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important to explore, and to give us the knowledge about certain facts.

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Some people believed that entertainers are more important than scientists. Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people buy local food?

In many countries, women and men are working full-time. It is, therefore, logical for women and men to share household tasks. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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