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The government should spend more money medical research to protect citizents’health than protecting the environment. Agree or disagree?

#government #money #research #citizents’health #environment
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It is argued that it is important for the central leader to spend more
money
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 on medical study to shield citizens’ health than defending the
environment
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. In my opinion, I disagree completely with
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 view It is evident that central authorities should spend much
money
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 on conserving the surroundings.
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, defending the
environment
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 brings a huge array of advantages. Because it it a great way to reduce contamination of the
surroundings
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surrounding
. Thanks a wide range of campaigns from central authorities
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 as sorting out of daily waste, encouraging the population to use public transports
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 in driving private cars, leading to decrease a lot of diseases due to environmental pollution.
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, it helps us spend less
money
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 on purchasing
medicine
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. Because of fresh air and clean
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environment which
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environment, which
 creates less ills than environmental contamination I believe that the government spend over fund on medical study to preserve citizens’ health makes several drawbacks. The
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 disadvantage is that people become to depend on
medicine
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.
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, they do not prevent ills due to the sick would be used
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medicine
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medicinally
medically
 to cure.
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, immure systems are extremely weak.
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, central leader must pay a number of amount
money
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 and time consuming on investigating medical treatment.
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, in my country, a few decades ago, scientist had to spent three years and 100 billions VND in order to studampicillin
medicine
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  In co
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
government's
nclusion, Personally, I totally disagree that The budgets should be invested more on medical study to defend citizens’ health by the goverments
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 in shielding the
environment
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