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Some parents prefer to have their children receive home tuition, an alternative that traditional education teachers have always questioned. What are reasons to support home tuition? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience Write at least 250 words.

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It is often seen in some groups of people who see
education
 at
home
 as vital for their children and give preference to it.
However
, some individuals, especially traditional
school
 teachers, are
skeptical
denying or questioning the tenets of especially a religion
sceptical
 of
this
 approach and question the reasons behind
this
.
This
 essay will discuss
various benefits
Suggestion
the various benefits
 of
home
 tuition.
First
 of all, there is an exclusive group of students to which
home
education
 is way better than
school
education
. The children with special needs like autistic or dyslexic students perform better in the
home
 environment than in the schools, where they may be bullied or
outcasted
a person who is rejected (from society or home)
outcasts
 due to their personality or
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. To illustrate
this
, a study was done by Oxford University in 2015, which showed that more than 20% of children in the UK are suffering from autism and only 2% of these students are able to complete
education
 in
school
.
However
,
more autistic
Suggestion
most autistic
 children can complete their studies if they are
home-schooled
Suggestion
homeschooled
.
This
 shows that
parents which
Accept comma addition
parents, which
 have children suffering from any particular disease or mental illness can prefer
home
education
 as compared to
school
education
. Another reason to support
home
 tuition is that children feel less pressured when they do their work in
home
 surroundings as compared to
school
 conditions.
This
 is supported by the fact that less number of
home-schooled
Suggestion
homeschooled
 students are suffering from depression
in contrast
 to traditional
education
 students.
Moreover
, more attention and time can be given to an individual if he works alone in their own
home
, which increases the probability of these students to grow more and become better in their preferred fields as they have more time and support as compared to
school
 students. To conclude, the ability to study from
home
 is a huge temptation for those people who are either suffering from some disease or wants to study at their own pace and want to feel less pressured.
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