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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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With increasing condition of pollutant existed in
air
 and non-negligible effect of them on our health and atmosphere most countries are struggling for clean
air
.
although
Suggestion
Although
 I believe that the
government
 has the upper hand in reducing
air
 pollution, individual
also play
Suggestion
also plays
has also played
 a vitally important role in
this
 responsibility.
on
Suggestion
On
 the one hand, the rulers of countries have all the means in order to control and drop the pollution rate so they can easily persuade the chairman of most car companies to produce high standard vehicles with lowest possible pollutant or in some cases even pollutant-free production.
Furthermore
, all broadcasting facilitates is under the control of
government
 which indicates that they are able to raise public awareness about some subjects
such
 as global warming and how to maintain clean
air
.
Finally
, legislating some rules and regulation which is the most noticeable power of governors give them the ability to improve the
air
 quality.
On the other hand
, despite all the facilities and abilities that
government
 has, improving the
air
 quality mission is not achievable.
however
Suggestion
However
, By the aid of people the succession probability will increase because they are the exact force that governments have to carry out their task and projects and without people they are just inoperative.
consequently
Suggestion
Consequently
, apart from what measures governments are taking into action they should have people acceptance to make it viable. In conclusion, I agree that the
government
 responsibilities in providing chemical-free habitat is
imperative but
Accept comma addition
imperative, but
 It is not sufficient to make it, so
by
Suggestion
with
 the cooperation of citizens and
government
 reaching to
this
 goal is highly likely.
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