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A country becomes more interesting and develops more quickly when its population includes a mixture of nationalities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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With the advent of digital transformation, people nowadays can almost do anything online, ranging from buying groceries to booking flight tickets. Due to the increasing popularity, many global organizations are investing their resources to bring
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 of all, almost all people are using the internet on their mobile phones, computers, etc. If they can buy the necessary things with a single click of a button,
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 there is nothing harmful in it.
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 practice gives people the ease of buying things online without wasting time and
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 reduces the hassle of going in-person to buy those things. To understand the advantage, consider the example of booking flight tickets online versus booking in-person by going to the company office. Obviously, it will save your time, effort, and money.
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 trend can be beneficial for the employment sector as it can provide more opportunities for the people of the community. For any company to get its product online, an application is required to be developed by professional developers, and
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Submitted by Bhavesh Ahir on

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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