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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern lifestyle. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays attraction towards processed foods made people accustomed
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to
 the fast paced life. It helps to satisfy their hunger in minimum
time
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 without much hassle, compare to home cooked
food
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.
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 essay will
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 discuss what are the positive sides of
this
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 trend and will throw some lights on how it surpass the drawback. In twenty-
first
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 century, people do have a quite hectic schedule in their day to day life.
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, very minimum
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 left to do cooking for themselves.
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, they prefer to eat
conveince
the state of being suitable or opportune
convenience
 foods, because, it is either semi-prepared or fully prepared and we just need to unpack and eat. To give
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an
 example,
maggi
any art that invokes supernatural powers
magic
Maggi
magi
 is a dish which is popular among
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young stars
 because it is effortless to prepare.
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 to it, there is a trend to prepare luxury foods at
home which
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home, which
 was beyond our imagination a generation back.
Couple
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A couple
 of fancy
food
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 items like
pancake
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pancakes
a pancake
,
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,
gulab
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Gulab
 jamoon which can easily be prepared in
short period
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a short period
 of
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 by following the recipe behind the packet. Survey in News Nations shows that, around 70% of people across the world prefer to eat ready-to-eat foods rather than cooking. On the flip side, sometimes these packaged
food
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 not able to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 our
tastebud
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taste bud
 when it compares to
homecooked
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home cooked
food
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.
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, it is not a major drawback and
morever
in addition
moreover
differnt
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
 person has
different choice
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a different choice
 of liking when it comes to
food
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. Some people find one convenience
food
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 delicious where others find the same less tempting. Survey shows
,
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,
10 out of hundred people find
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packaged
 foods are of no use because of no essence. In a nutshell, In modern days, people prefer to eat fast
food
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 to satisfy their appetite because of lack of
time
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 and it is a trouble free activity from preparing a meal to cleaning
utenstils
an implement for practical use (especially in a household)
utensils
 and they are ready to comprise on the quality over quantity.

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