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Some people think international car-free days are an effective way of reducing air pollution, others think there are some other ways. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The traffic emission is one of the most serious problems that human is dealing with nowadays. In order to solve
this
 problem, there are many suggestions that
car
-free days should be held internationally.
However
, I believe that these events
just achieve
Suggestion
have just achieved
 a little success, and there are many solutions to prevent exhaust fumes. By organizing
car
-free days, the numbers of cars will be decreased in these days, except the use of cars for emergency situations.
This
 measure, from my opinion, there are two
fact
Suggestion
facts
 should be considered.
Firstly
, in 365 days, about 2% of annual
fumes
Suggestion
fume
 emission is decreased, resulting from one-week
car
-free day. Let’s consider it in more detail, 2% of annual exhaust fumes is not a significant result, meaning that it is unworthy to organize
car
-free days.
Secondly
, during the event, some people may lose their wage,
such
 as taxi drivers or gas station employees.
On the other hand
, there are many effective methods to minimize the traffic fumes. Increasing taxes on
car
 ownership is one the best ways to reduce the number of cars. If cost for
private
Suggestion
private cars
a private car
car
 is so expensive, many people will give up purchasing
car
 and switching to public transports.
Besides
,
government
Suggestion
the government
 should raise public awareness of restricting the use of
car
Suggestion
a car
cars
the car
.
Instead
 of cars, bicycles or walk on foot should be taken to
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • emissions standards
  • renewable energy
  • environmentally friendly
  • public transportation
  • pedestrian zones
  • commuter behavior
  • awareness
  • incentives
  • air pollution
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