Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #community #service #part #school #programmers #charity #neighborhood #sports #children

Today some

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Today, some

people affirm that social works,

such

as the working for charity, improving the

neighborhood

a surrounding or nearby region

neighbourhood

, assisting other people, cleaning, or teaching younger children must be a part of the school curriculum. Certainly

this

kind of

work

influence

Suggestion

teenagers positively,

first

of all self-responsibility, self-discipline and it helps young people develop their own personal qualities. Serving those less fortunate than ourselves teaches us many lessons including how to

work

with people from other backgrounds and the value of hard

work

. In spite of these advantages I do not agree that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of

education programmes

Suggestion

the education programme

education programme

an education programme

Suggestion

such

a young age, teenagers should not be engaged on

this

works,

this

can negatively affect their

worldview

, they will think life is too complicated and they will not enjoy life. I think it should be on a voluntary basis and at adulthood. Because education system is including a lot of subjects and pupils do not have free time. In the age of information technology to keep abreast of everything they should know a lot, to read a lot and must

work

hard on yourself.

Besides

this

they have to get a time for themselves,

for example

hobbies and entertainments. Another reason for my disagreement with

this

is student should be more focused on education and should not be forced to do something that might distract them from their main target and task. All in all,

school

Suggestion

the school

schools

should provide academic skills. Life skills, attitude and

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

should inculcate from parents.

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In a nutshell
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1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

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Accurate spelling & word formation

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Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

There are currently many endangered species at risk of extinction and it’s equally important to save all of them. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The rise of social media platforms has made it easier for people to vent their frustrations and complaints publicly. What is the consequence of this trend? Is there any benefit to expressing complaints on social media?

In many cities, planners tend to arrange shops, schools, offices and homes in a specific area and separated them each other. Do you think the advantages of this policy outweigh disadvantages.

The fake news is becoming increasingly common in the era of social media. What problems will it cause to individuals and the society? Suggest some measures to deal with it.

Due to success of convenience food and ready-made meals, we are failing to pass on adequate culinary skills to the next generation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.