Televised talent shows have become popular in many societies today. Are these shows a good method of finding talented people, or are they just entertainment? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Today,
televison
broadcasting visual images of stationary or moving objects
television
televisions
is one of the most essential electronic devices in our houses.
Talent
shows consist in interesting shows on TV and people enjoy watching them for entertainment. The organizers declare that they use
these show
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this show
these shows
to find talented people, but in my view, these shows are just entertainment.
Firstly
, I assure that the main purpose of talented shows is to gain a lot of money as much as they can. They don't organize the shows for free. For
this
financial aim, they try to generate many false or exaggerated situations to attract the audiences to watch their shows on TV. The more people watch their show, the more money they get from
advertisements
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the advertisements
.
For example
, when I watched a
talent
shows called Vietnam Got
Talent
on TV, there was a funny situation, but It was fairly easy to find out that situation had happened with
previously prepared scenario
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the previously prepared scenario
a previously prepared scenario
.
Secondly
,
talent
shows often have no limit for examinee's performance. Examinees can sing, draw, do some magic or show some their special abilities.
However
, there are often 3 or 4 judges with different backgrounds, typically they are singer,
model or
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model, or
musician so
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musician, so
it's difficult for them to assess the performance of the examinees fairly.
Also
the judges are often affected by the organizers so they can make some unfair decisions.
For example
, if there are 2 people taking part in the
contest
, a person has quite better performance than the
other but
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other, but
the other person is more beautiful, the judges affected by the organizers will tend to choose the more good-looking one because a good-looking examinee
gains
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gain
more the
audiances
a gathering of spectators or listeners at a (usually public) performance
audiences
audience
for the shows. Televised
talent
shows are not the only method to discover talented people. There are many other ways to do
this
such
as organizing
academic
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an academic contest
academic contests
contest
or specialized
contest
. These sorts of
contest
focus on one field so it will be easier and more effective to detect extremely talented people in that field. In conclusion, to a certain extent, televised
talent
shows can find a handful of talented
people but
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people, but
the aim of these shows are
also
constant - to gain money. We have plenty of better alternatives of finding
talent
. So everyone shouldn't be bordered with
this
problem, we just simply enjoy the shows.
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