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Televised talent shows have become popular in many societies today. Are these shows a good method of finding talented people, or are they just entertainment? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Today,
televison
broadcasting visual images of stationary or moving objects
television
televisions
 is one of the most essential electronic devices in our houses.
Talent
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 shows consist in interesting shows on TV and people enjoy watching them for entertainment. The organizers declare that they use
these show
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this show
these shows
 to find talented people, but in my view, these shows are just entertainment.
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, I assure that the main purpose of talented shows is to gain a lot of money as much as they can. They don't organize the shows for free. For
this
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 financial aim, they try to generate many false or exaggerated situations to attract the audiences to watch their shows on TV. The more people watch their show, the more money they get from
advertisements
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the advertisements
.
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, when I watched a
talent
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 shows called Vietnam Got
Talent
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 on TV, there was a funny situation, but It was fairly easy to find out that situation had happened with
previously prepared scenario
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the previously prepared scenario
a previously prepared scenario
.
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,
talent
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 shows often have no limit for examinee's performance. Examinees can sing, draw, do some magic or show some their special abilities.
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, there are often 3 or 4 judges with different backgrounds, typically they are singer,
model or
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model, or
musician so
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musician, so
 it's difficult for them to assess the performance of the examinees fairly.
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 the judges are often affected by the organizers so they can make some unfair decisions.
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, if there are 2 people taking part in the
contest
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, a person has quite better performance than the
other but
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other, but
 the other person is more beautiful, the judges affected by the organizers will tend to choose the more good-looking one because a good-looking examinee
gains
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gain
 more the
audiances
a gathering of spectators or listeners at a (usually public) performance
audiences
audience
 for the shows. Televised
talent
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 shows are not the only method to discover talented people. There are many other ways to do
this
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such
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 as organizing
academic
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an academic contest
academic contests
contest
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 or specialized
contest
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. These sorts of
contest
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 focus on one field so it will be easier and more effective to detect extremely talented people in that field. In conclusion, to a certain extent, televised
talent
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 shows can find a handful of talented
people but
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people, but
 the aim of these shows are
also
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 constant - to gain money. We have plenty of better alternatives of finding
talent
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. So everyone shouldn't be bordered with
this
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 problem, we just simply enjoy the shows.
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