It seems that finally the world has woken up to the reality that we are seriously damaging our planet. Pollution is killing our oceans, the air in many parts of the world is dangerous and a health hazard for people living in cities, poisonous chemicals are entering the food chain -to give just a few examples. Globally, efforts are now being made to try and protect the planet. In your opinion, is enough being done to save the planet or is it already too late?

We do not know our
environment how
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environment, how
much valuable for all of us. We all live in the same
world
this
is our habitat and we should be much more cautious about where we live. The
world
encounters some problems like
ocean
and air
pollution
. We can be more attentive so as to deserving the nature. Doing something
for
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about
protect
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protecting
the
environment
two of which are
government
can take action to eliminate
pollution
and individually we can take some precautions. Uneducated people are the main concern because, if people do not know why they should try to protect
environment
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the environment
or how they can do
this
, they cannot keep saving the
environment
properly. In order to
achieving
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achieve
this
goal,
government
can launch the campaigns in every state regularly,
also
they can contribute informative booklets. What these campaigns purpose is
educated
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educating
people well and encouraging people to protect the ecosystem.
In addition
to
this
, the other way to protecting is punishments. Earning money is so hard in
this
century;
therefore
, people do not want to
losing
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lose
any of
this
. Factories can be checked by
government whether
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the government, whether
the government whether
they release any dangerous chemicals into the
ocean
or not.
Also
, factories should use filter in order not to
polluting
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pollute
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
. If they do not pay
attention these rules
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attention to these rules
, they should pay
fain
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fines
fine
which should be controlled by
government
. The
government
always take
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always takes
has always taken
care their citizens benefit which the most important one is their health. All these precautions can help to
keeping
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keep
them healthy.
Moreover
, we can take some precautions individually to protect our habitat. We can do something before we criticize others no to do. What we expose in the air
is consist
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consists
of very dangerous chemicals. We can use hybrid cars or we can stop using deodorants and any risky chemicals to prevent air
pollution
.
Other
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Another
thing is when we go to vacation in the
ocean
, we can see some people throw their rubbish into the
ocean
. When we saw
this
, we should warn these kinds of people to eliminate
pollution
.
Also
, hotels can take some warning signs.
Furthermore
, we can collect our rubbish and classify them appropriately like glasses, metals and papers and
then
we can throw them into the recycle boxes.
This
is the other way to overcome
pollution
. We all
live
go away from a place
leave
the
world
and if we want to live clean
world
, we should take some responsibilities. Considering all these, it has some different ways to protect
environment
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the environment
. Our
environment
struggle
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struggles
to
pollution which
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pollution, which
can be prevented by
government
and us. Citizens can be educated and punished by
government
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the government
.
Individually we
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Individually, we
can warn other people and we can take some responsibilities.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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