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Some people believe it is a good idea for students to work part-time to ensure better opportunities in the future. Others are of the opinion, job during study distracts the individual. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Is it often argued that student should
work
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 part-time while studying. Some people completely agree with
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, other are against it. As long as, each group has his own arguments, what about you?
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, do not judge without thinking, because
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 sensitive issue should be treated well. It is widely accepted that students should
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 on their free-time to gain money.
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, some parents cannot afford the educational fees;
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 why students should
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. As we all know, nowadays
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 is harder than before; it is not easy to afford a whole family needs. A good illustration of that, in 2017 starving person's percentage increased, and
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 because of the new
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life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
.
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,
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 need who can face it as Jake hope said. As well as, working a part-time is the best way to help students to become independent. To explain, it is known that poor places teenagers can stand pressure more.
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, a popular believe that students should face on their study more than working, to
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 a better
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 after the graduation. In another way, if students
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, their studying time will be limited maybe they will not have time to study at all.
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, rich students are better at school, because they face in studying.
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, they will not be able to have friend normally and they will not have time for going out. For more explanation, their
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 will be for studying and working only there will be no free-time.
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 illustrated by Dr.Amanda report, she reported that teenagers should have at least 3 free-time hours a day to avoid depression. To sum up,
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 is important, but for adults. I strongly disagree with students, part-time
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, because they deserve to live the moment and concentrate on their school.
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