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Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cellphone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happpening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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 extinction is becoming increasingly prevalent in
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 day and age. Some people believe that
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 should not be a cause of concern as
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 will be simpler with fewer languages. I completely disagree with
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 opinion and I believe that
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 will still remain as complicated as it is even with fewer languages.
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, the number of languages that an average person is able to be comfortably fluent in will be two or three at the most. If people are of the opinion that the demise of certain languages would make it easier for them to use their native
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 for fluently communicating overseas for work or travel, they would be completely mistaken.
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 is because the countries have deep rooted traditions and cultures that cannot fade away so quickly.
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, one would still have to learn Chinese or Japanese if they would like to work in either of these places.
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, countries with one
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 are not free from a complicated
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.
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 is because the root of the complexities of lives does not reside in the number of languages that exists in the world, but in the way mankind treats one another. We could have two people in a room who speak the same
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 but have multiple disagreements and have another two who might get along very well despite the
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 gap. In conclusion, I believe that
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 will not be much easier just because there are fewer languages. In fact, the world will be a much more interesting place if different cultures and languages co-exist.
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, ultimately
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 will become simplified only when the mankind shows the resolve to bridge the gap in their everyday communication
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