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Today the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and suggest solutions.

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Undoubtedly, nowadays the way of living style of people living in metropolitan cities has been continuously declining because of increasing stressful
life
.
This
 essay shall intend to delve the reasons and possible solutions to overcome
this
 issue. On the one hand, there are plenty of possible causes behind
this
 dilemma. Primarily, the stress in the entity of the people is rising continuously either it is personal or professional. People do not know how to enjoy their
life
.
For instance
, people either self-employed or they do any job come at home with lots of workload and they have not sufficient time to enjoy with their family. What is more, the
second
 possible cause is financial burden in their
life
. Everybody wants to get settled in their
life
 and to become wealthy. In
this
 race all becomes a rabbit and forget about the reality of
life
. These people have only one passion to become well off.
As a result
, they save all their money as a Meiser and not do any enjoyment.
On the other hand
, there are some possible solutions to overcome
this
 debatable issue.
To begin
 with, people should give spent some time from their hectic schedule with their family and friends to get enjoy by doing some leisure activities
such
 as watching movies, playing games, travelling et cetera.
Moreover
, they should realise the true value of
life
 means, why
this
life
 is important for everyone. In
this
 way, they will not become the part of the crowd. To Sum up, doubtlessly, people of big cities have been decreasing their quality
life
 for a few decades since they indulged themselves in hectic
life
 with lots of pressure. If they give time to themselves,
then
 definitely they will enjoy a fruitful
life
.
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