The maps depict current structures of Islip town center and future look after planned developments are applied.
The two pie charts illustrate the
energy
usage of an average household and greenhouse
gas
emission
from Fix the agreement mistake
emissions
this
usage, in Australia. Units are in percentage and there are six categories; namely heating, water
heating, refrigeration, cooling, lighting and other appliances.
Overall
, energy
consumption caused by heating is the highest, but heating water
releases the most greenhouse
gas
. The cooling processes are the lowest for both of these parameters.
When examined closely, energy
cost of heating is 42% of the total Add an article
the energy
energy
used, followed by water
heating, which is at 30%. Energy
consumed by cooling and lighting are
significantly lower than Change the verb form
is
other
categories, at 2% and 4%, respectively.
Change preposition
in other
On the other hand
, greenhouse
gas
emission caused by water
heating is %32 of the total. With the addition of heating and cooling, they released a
half of all the Remove the article
apply
greenhouse
gas
. The emisson
of other appliances is placed Correct your spelling
emission
mission
second
at 28% of the total. Finally
, cooling is the lowest greenhouse
releaser, at 3% of the overall
gas
emisson
.Correct your spelling
emissions
emission
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