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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientic research, business and the academic world .Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely

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Sharing the instruction is good,
however
, everyone should know about what the things going on in the real world. But in some point of view we cannot discuss all the precious data.
For example
: if we can take Scientific research, we could not pass all the message to the public. We should hide some secret things that are key to the company. In Industry perspective, I can say until unless if we trust anyone we could not transfer all the valuable things in public it should impact our financial aspects, and while coming to the academic world we should drive through all the key points, and it will be helping others to analyse both positive and negative versions. At work, we should not discuss all the info to others.We have a small company in our town and we are getting more profits on that because of sharing the advertisements and maintaining the good employees to coordinate with the customers.
Although
 we are giving proper friendly guidance to the customers.
However with in
Accept comma addition
However, within
However within
 the budget calculations, we are providing better benefits to them.
Moreover
, If we can pass on all the techniques on how to interact with the customers and our profits to others definitely it will be impacted our trade reputation. To build a strong base for all the youngsters, each child
also
 should show interest in publishing the white papers based on their investigation on that particular subject.
Therefore
, it is always advisable to double check before deciding to transfer the message to others in any field except education, As education is the field without restrictions and everyone in that age should be benefited in all angles to build a strong career path. Whereas in other fields,
likewise
 there should be some limitation based on the sensitivity of the inputs to be discussed.
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