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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your personal opinion

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Some sets of people argue that it is adequate to face worse situation, like unworthy
job
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 or lack of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve
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 conditions. I personally believe that accepting challenges are good in life. In the same way people should try to do
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 type of issues.
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, some groups of people consider that, it is ok to accepting a bad situation without doing any
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 on it. To give a clear example, some persons have
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 of accepting challenges in their life. They do not put any kind of efforts in progress in
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the job
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. They are ok with limited money.
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, they have no future plan, they want to think about only present.
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 kind of attitude remains them wherever they are. There will be no chance of
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. Another example, some people are not educated enough to get reputed
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 and High pay work,
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 they cannot improve themselves even if they want.
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, there are many groups of people who believe that it will be beneficial to improve
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 kind of situations for their transcendence. They want to be successful financially as well as in their jobs.
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, people who are hardworking in nature, always choose high goals and never afraid
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 accepting difficult tasks.
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, highly qualified people always think that
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 is better. In conclusion, Some sets of people argue that it is good to be faced hard situation, like unsatisfactory
job
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 or lack of money. On the other side some argue that it is better to try and improve
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 conditions. I personally believe that accepting challenges are good in life. In the same way people should try to do increase of
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 type of issues.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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