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In the modern world, it is possible to shop, work, and communicate online without any face-to-face contact with other people. Is this a positive or negative development?

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In
this
 today's world,
internet
 has had a significant impact on the lives of people in the society. It had brought an array of changes in many job sectors
such
 as medicine, information technology, fashion and many others. Due to
this
, it is now possible for people to shop, work, and communicate online without having face-to-face contact. I would like to discuss about
this
development
 in the upcoming paragraphs and will provide my point of view on
this
 topic.
To begin
 with, there myriad of reasons why one can say that we can consider it as a positive
development
:
Firstly
, it is very convenient for people to communicate with their loved ones who are present anywhere in the world. To elaborate, because of the free and easy accessibility of many applications like
whatsapp
, Google chat, and telegram we can just video call to our family members with the tap of a single button and that too we can do it whenever we want without out any restrictions.
Secondly
, starting a business online can not only reach wider customers, but
also
 eliminate many factors
such
 as rent and electricity, which are vital in order to start an offline business.
Moreover
, in times of epidemics, many people can do their office work and attend business calls or meetings online without facing any hurdles.
For example
, in the recent pandemic COVID-19,
also
 called as corona virus, many software
development
 companies are encouraging their employees to work from home using
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 so that they can reach their deadlines on time.
On the other hand
, it can be considered as a negative
development
 because of the following reasons.
Firstly
, since many businesses and companies operate online there are quite a number of people who want to misuse and misguide people who are gullible or who do not have any prior knowledge related to technology. To exemplify, in the recent years there are umpteen people who have lost their money and personal information because of hackers, who try to penetrate and steal data from
internet
Suggestion
the internet
. In conclusion,
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 is used by people across the globe and it made people's lives easier by eliminating many monotonous and mundane tasks
such
 as going to buy tickets or food products from an offline store.
Although
 it favoured for some negative developments, there are relatively
more number
Suggestion
numbered
number
 of positive developments.
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