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All over the world, societies are facing a growing problem with obesity. This problem affects both children and adults. What are the reasons for this rise in obesity. How could it be tackled?

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The problem of gaining
weight
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 is
upsurging
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 all over the world and affecting
both
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 youngsters and adults. The main reason for gaining
weight
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 is the sedentary lifestyle and
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 problem can be solved by doing regular exercise. The major cause of the rising problems with bodyweight is an inactive way of living; nowadays people prefer that type of profession that does not require any physical efforts. The passive way of living consumes fewer calories and increases the
weight
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 of the
body
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, and heavyweight results in the serious problems in different organs of the
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 in
both
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 the children and adults.
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, research done in Samsung company concluded that about 78 % of the staff prefer table works that do not require any physical effort and among them, 70 % become the victim of obesity. The problem of high
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weight
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 can be solved by active participation. The involvement in the games requiring physical efforts play a great role in consuming the calories obtained from the heavy diets, and
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 consumption of diets prevents people from gaining an extra
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weight
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 which keeps
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 the teenagers and youths fit and healthy.
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, research done among the fattest people in Kathmandu showed that about 90 % of them loosed their
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weight
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 by doing exercise daily, and playing games
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on
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 the weekend. In conclusion, the main reason for the increasing number of problems with obesity affecting
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 the younger and youths is an inactive lifestyle which can be easily overcome by performing exercises.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Obesity
  • Overweight
  • Epidemic
  • Sedentary
  • Processed food
  • Fast food
  • Nutritional education
  • Awareness
  • Stress
  • Emotional eating
  • Genetic factors
  • Access
  • Healthy food options
  • Marketing
  • Urbanization
  • Lifestyles
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