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Some people think governments should spend less money on arts and invest more in education. How far do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Many governments today allocate significant portions of their national budgets to the
development
Suggestion
Development
 and protection of arts. I think
this
 is necessary and governments should not
curb
Suggestion
Curb
art
 budgets,
although
 it is vital that more money is spent on education, as well. Decreasing public financial support for
art
 would definitely leave normal people with little or no access to original fine
art
 pieces. High
art
 is immensely sought and supported by the private sector in most parts of the world, with
art
 galleries and agents investing heavily in famous professional artists so that they can sell their works to wealthy private collectors.
Therefore
, if the government stops investing in
this
 sector, there will practically be no paintings, sculptures or other forms of
art
 available for ordinary citizens to enjoy, which can not only diminish their pursuit of beauty and perfection, but
also
 leave them more depressed and passive, even vulgar.
However
, education plays a crucial role in the development of a country. More educated and
skillful
having or showing knowledge and skill and aptitude
skilful
 citizens can contribute greatly to a country’s progress since its industries,
healthcare
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health care
 system and
defense
(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies
defence
defines
 capabilities rely mostly on its progress in different fields of science and technology, which in turn requires
skillful
 teachers, advanced computers and better-equipped laboratories.
This
 means that the more money is spent on educational facilities and equipment and the more budget is allocated to supporting students and educators, the more likely it is for a country to develop. In conclusion, I think governments ought to maintain their financial support for arts while increasing education budgets, ensuring both continued access to fine arts for their citizens and sustained development
for
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of
 their countries.
Submitted by Deep Faldu on

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