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In school and universities, girls tend to chose arts while boys like science. What are the reason of this trend and do you think this tendency should be changed?

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It is a wide spread believe that female students tend to select arts programs in schools and colleges whereas make students prefer science stream.
This
 essay will explain the most evident reasons behind the selections of subjects on the basis of gender.
This
 essay will
also
 suggest that it ought to be their own interests and preferences. One of the obvious objective is a gender difference. People have an inclination that females can only be good at arts and humanities, which include subjects like sociology, music and so on.
On the other hand
, male are mostly considered for science and commerce subjects because they have strong cognitive ability than girls.
Secondly
, parents force their children to select the stream that they think their children can do without realising their real interest. An Observation shows that 90% of student pick their high study stream because of their parents wants them to choose.
Thus
, myth and parents' pressure young people to choose a subject at their respective gender. I strongly believe that
this
 inclination ought to be changed.
Firstly every
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Firstly, every
 individual, whether it is a girl or boy has rights to choose subjects in which they are interested. It has been seen that female has strong intellectual skills and are able to better than boys.
Moreover
, A study shows that male is the best cook. In conclusion, girls preferring arts and boys go for science were a natural phenomena in the past but now the trend is changing. Students can be seen equal number of strengths in both departments.
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