In the last few decades there have been more and more cases of famous people being hounded by the press. Some people think that famous people in the media have no right privacy. To what extent do you agree?

Nowadays, media
is selling
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are selling
everything for their sales and profit even some celebrities has been
lost their
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lost, their
personal life and are followed everywhere around the world. I completely agree
on
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with
this
statement with myriad reasons which are explained below.
To begin
with,
paparazzies
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paparazzi
set their network to catch photos of public
figures so,
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figures, so
no one can hide their life from them even children of famous personalities has been caught.
Second
, a small incidents of them are widely spread in order to negative ways in media to snatch focus of public on their channel.
As a result
, people give their decision about
such
incident and they have to accept it willingly or unwillingly.
For example
, a television actor had been claimed of
threating
create by training and teaching
train
treating
by their maid and reporter set premier over it and run continuously on tv with
vote
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the vote
.
Therefore
, massive votes had been generated
aginst
in contact with
against
him. But reality was revealed after
few months which
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a few months, which
a few months which
was against the votes. On
other hand
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the other hand
, by posting personal moments photographs on social media like Instagram and Facebook by some actors and actresses, they try to elevate their followers. The path which is used by
then
objective case of they
them
, is led to open their room doors to
lost
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lose
their hidden life.
Secondly
, these days Twitter is becoming a vital medium to be famous by posting acid comments on current
affairs
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affairs, however, some
affairs, however some
however
some things gone wrong and trolled by
entire nation
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an entire nation
the entire nation
entire nations
.
For instance
, a successful director has posted his post about nepotism and became
star
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stars
in a night. To recapitulate, news reporter cannot leave anyone over a nail incident.
Thus
, everyone
are living
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is living
a
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
home without
roof
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a roof
the roof
in
greedy world
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a greedy world
.
Government
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The government
should make guidelines for
news channel
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a news channel
to say anything about anybody openly.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hounded
  • sensational news
  • unwarranted scrutiny
  • blurs the line
  • public interest
  • pervasive
  • public persona
  • complex relationship
  • invasive
  • ethical frameworks
  • privacy is upheld
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