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Many people think that happiness relies upon the individuals, while others think it is affected by other factors. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

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The happiness is very much vital component of anyone's
life
.
That is
, the joy of a
person
 plays a vital role in his wellbeing and his state of mind.
However
, many people argue that it depends on a particular
person
, while, other's argue that, the joy of an individual depends on many factors like financial stability, social status and lot more. In my opinion, many factors are responsible for the happiness of a
person
.
To begin
 with, many humans believe that, their delight connects with the certain individuals in their
life
. The reason for
this
 is, they give much importance to individuals which are very much near to them and has the great weighted in their
life
.
For instance
, consider, a newborn child to a family, in
this
 case, the bliss of the family will be related to the baby health and his well being, if the infant is happy, family will be happy and vice versa.
Therefore
, for many people contentment is related to the individuals in their
life
.
On the other hand
, for many people, pleasure in
life
, depends on the many factors. These factors can be anything, from having the financial power of the social status, achieving certain goals in the
life
.
For example
,
Firstly
, talking about myself, my goal in
life
 is to migrate to the Canada and settle there, while pursing
this
 goal give me immense pleasure in
life
,
Secondly
, I
also
 want to fulfil all the wishes of my parent, which gives me lots of joy.
Thus
, I can say that, prosperity depends on the different factors for different
person
. To conclude, In my opinion, euphoria for any individual depends on lots of factors, because
life
 is a complex game, so many things are related to the satisfaction of a
person
, rather than a few individuals in
life
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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