How can early access to technology affect the development of children?

The evolution of
technology
plays an essential role in our society.
Besides
having positive impacts,
technology
exerts a number of negative influences on people, especially children. Impacting on physical health and approaching to bad contents are the results of children’s early access to
technology
. The
first
negative effect is weakening children’s physical health become weak. When children use
technology
, the high-energy visible light which releases from the screen is harmful to their eyes. Children always keep their eyes closed and utilize
technology
for a long period, which makes them susceptible to short-sightedness.
In addition
, the light from the screen
also
affects the condition of skin and may cause premature aging in fact. According to a research, in Vietnam, the rate of short-sightedness among children is about 20-60% depending on age, in which it is estimated that nearly 3 million children aged 0-15 years suffer from refractive errors because of excessive use of smartphone or television.
Thus
,
technology
is weakening their physical
health including
Accept comma addition
health, including
their eyes.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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