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Some people prefer to provide help or support directly to the local community. Others prefer to give money to national or international charitable organizations. Discuss both views and give ur opinions?

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While in today life, there are several ways for wealthy people to contribute their
money
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 to help or improve the life of not prosperous people in the country. Some people choose to buy essential items and give it directly to the community,
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, others prefer transferring their
money
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 through
charity
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 agencies. Both of these have negative and positive, but
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe that the best ways for backing the needy goes to their place to able to help them. On the one hand, a large amount of people chooses to donate their salary to
charity
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 organizations because charitable institutions are convenient. Many more people can be helped simultaneously as more fund will be raised from various places.
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, by the size of these groups and the total of volunteers are advantageous to go and transports aid goods
such
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 as food, clothes to hard places like desert. They think remote areas better than individuals.
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, it is
also
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 advantageous to directly to the local community because
charity
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 organization’s are not always
trustable
Manageable; tractable; hence, moderate; not violent
treatable
. They afraid that their
money
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 would be used to wrong ways and go to the pocket of corrupt authorities
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 of helping poor people.
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, in some provinces of Vietnam, most by donating payment stayed in the pockets of
charity
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organizations
Suggestion
organization's
organization
organizations'
 leaders, beside that, there are
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 fraud agencies create to scam people’s
money
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 and disappear without any traces after that.
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, help by
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 way is given immediately without any dealing paperwork or waiting a long time. In conclusion, I totally believe that seeding
money
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 directly to who in need is a good way to help the needy and it is a better way and more effectively than giving the donation to functional organizations.

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