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On a recent holiday, you lost a valuable item. Fortunately, you have travel insurance to cover the cost of anything lost. Write a letter to the manager of your insurance company. In your letter: describe the item you lost explain how you lost it, and tell the insurance company what you would like them to do.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to inform you that I want to claim
insurance
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 for my iPad Pro 11 from your company TD because I misplaced my tablet on the plane during my travel from Vancouver to Toronto. I owned an Apple tablet of 4th generation with a serial number 123ADRG6578F in grey
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 that cost $2500 worth.
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 device was purchased by me about six months ago from Best Buy and was fully insured. I had travel
insurance
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 device from your institute and I was paying $35 per month. Unfortunately, I lost it
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 week during my excursion.
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, I remember very clearly that I had my iPad in my bag till the time I borrowed my ticket and I think it was misplaced somewhere in the plane because I found it missing as soon as I got out of the flight to collect my luggage.
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, I tried calling Flair Airlines as well if they found any device, but they have not found anything yet. I want to claim the
insurance
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 amount of my product because I want to clear out its initial amount. I have attached the bill of purchase and leftover value of my item provided to me by the bank
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 my all
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 documents. Hope I will get everything cleared soon. If you need any other documents or any
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coherence cohesion
To enhance clarity, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single aspect of your concerns, e.g., one for the description, another for the loss, and a final one for your request.
coherence cohesion
Consider using a variety of sentence structures to make your writing more engaging and to demonstrate your language skills better.
task achievement
Make sure to explicitly state what you are asking the insurance company to do in a clear and direct manner to ensure there is no confusion about your request.
task achievement
You've described the lost item in detail, which effectively communicates what you are claiming for.
coherence cohesion
The logical progression from introducing the loss, detailing it, to the action you want taken is clear and allows for easy understanding.
coherence cohesion
Your closing and greeting were both appropriately formal and polite, fitting the context of a letter to an insurance company.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • valuable possession
  • insurance claim
  • misplace
  • irreplaceable
  • receipt
  • policyholder
  • reimbursement
  • coverage
  • claim number
  • deductible
  • documentation
  • authenticate
  • liability
  • premium
  • accidental loss
  • indemnity
  • beneficiary
  • contact details
  • substantiate
  • correspondence
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