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Some people think that it is better to build more public parks and sports facilities in new town rather shopping malls. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In these days, there are a lot of
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,
gym
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 and mall together in a new city. A
group
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 of people believes that a government should build many
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park
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parks
 and
gym
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 in a city and it is really better them shopping malls. We think, public parks and sports can be important for them. In
this
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 essay, we want to express accept and disagree.
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 of all, public parks and sports can have a lot of advantages. Well, all people usually exercise every day and use public sports facilities. And
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, children need parks and play there.
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, these places can help them to be healthy and fresh. To illustrate, one recent study by British Americans scientist suggest that 90 percent of people need parks and sports and we cannot give them. In my opinion, we are able to live without shopping.
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, a
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 of people prefer to go a shopping
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a park
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.
Moreover
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, they believe that should go a shopping every day and cannot live without it. Because of
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, the government decides to make many malls and extend every day.
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, in my city, the number of malls, are really more than public sports or parks. I think, the government earns enough money for shopping. So, they build malls more and more. In conclusion, a
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 of people attend to make many public parks and
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 another
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 like to make shopping. We think,
park
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 and sports facilities can aid all people and become happy, but, build shopping mall do not need for all human.

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