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Many people believe that every individual is responsible for his/her own healthy lifestyle. Others believe that government should take care of it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #lifestyle #government #care
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 modern era some people think that individual is responsible for their own healthy
life style whereas
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lifestyle, whereas
lifestyle whereas
 others believe that it is
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government
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a government duty
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 to encourage masses to take
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 of it
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 essay we will examine both sides of the arguments and give my overall
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a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
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firstly
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, it is each and every
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person's
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 to take
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 of their selves
moverover they
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moreover, they
moreover they
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 can do exercise regularly
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at
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,
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the mother
 is responsible for cooking healthy stuff at home so that her family will not eat unhealthy food outside.
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government
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 should take
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 of junk eatables who are selling for cheaper rate to attract people of all ages
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,mainly children get magnetic attach to chinese and japanese food
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 they show their creativity in advertisements as well as publishing their palm plates in schools , streets,colleges
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 that they eat all food at very low rate and suffer for obesity
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 others believe that it is
government
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duty
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 to bring awareness in public
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 to
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government
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 can build parks and play grounds so that people can go and do exercise in it
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 in recent issue of covid19 has been showing hell for older ages and small children below 5 years of age in
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 case
government
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 took alot
care
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 in bringing awareness in public they used all platforms
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 as instagram, facebook, whatsup, television, and radio
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 pandemic virus pass from human to human so they did get any medicine but took right decision at right time by giving information through celebraties futhermore conducting camps and health related suggestions to everyone
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 but not the least their are individuals who are equally responsible for own health whereas people have to adopt their health diet according to their choices .
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 policy only be succesful if each and every his/her tries to keep up and decide to maintain healthy
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healthy life
, comparing both the statements it is the
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 of individual as well as
government
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 to encourage people to develop thier healthylife style
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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