Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that some knowledges should not be shared with everybody;
however
, others think that all
information
can be shared with everybody. In my opinion, all people around the world have a right to inform, no matter these are how valuable. Especially, the scientific experiments’ results ought to be published to the world. Some countries have not any resources of interest in science enough;
nevertheless
, they have really knowledgeable scientists who they can help to improve experiments. People who do not
share
information
are prevented science’s development. It might really significant consequences for the world.
For instance
, in recent times, we are encountering COVID-19. If a group of people found the vaccination and will not
share
this
with us,
this
is,
also
, affect them thoroughly. Not sharing scientific inventions is very harmful for who do not want to do
this
. In business areas, all people need to each other for both export and import. Business needs to communicate with others if they want to earn money. All business men and women ought to
share
their
information
with each other. If they do not do
this
, in
this
case, they could not know how to develop themselves, and they cannot find appropriate buyer for their goods.
Also
, it causes some damage into the economy.
For example
, if parents did not tell their experiences to their children, their business will be affecting that badly as when these children start working, they might mess up everything. Considering all
this
, it is unwise not to
share
information
with others. Sharing always can help us to improve ourselves in all areas because we could not know who can develop our ideas, and we all need each other to live. That’s why, all
information
should be shared whether these are very significant for us or not.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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