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In many countries, school children are required to wear school uniforms. Do you think this should be enforced in all school?

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In many countries, the number of high schools that permits students to decide what to wear to
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 is increasing.
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, students are still required to wear uniforms when attending
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 and in my opinion,
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 is something that should be enforced in all schools for the following reasons. Primarily, students, especially those in their teenage age, are under pressure both academically and socially.
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 insisting on a standardized
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 within the
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 would alleviate some of
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 as it means that the students do not have to worry about what their peers think of their dressing or if they are wearing the latest fashion.
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 has the added advantage of those from lower-income families who may not be able to afford the clothes worn by those from richer families.
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, wearing uniforms to
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 does not only remove social pressure, but
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 has a psychological advantage, as the students are dressed in the mode of attire used for the study.
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, much like wearing a suit and tie may signal go to work for many people, whereas, wearing a
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 prepares the child for the day of learning. 
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,
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 perhaps works best for younger students. By age 16 or 17 students may not be too comfortable to wear
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 uniforms as the idea of 'conforming' by wearing a
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 could discourage them from pursuing
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 is often the time when young adults are looking to establish their own clear identity. It is at
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 point that it may be appropriate for the students to wear more casual clothing
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 as jeans and T-shirts when they reach their later teens. In conclusion,
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 a
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 does have advantages at certain stages of a student's academic career, there is
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 a time when the enforcement of a standardised set of clothing may be tending to hinder the achievement of a goal.
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