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The only way to improve safety and our roads is to give much stricter punishments for driving offences what extent do you agree or disagree?

#safety #roads #punishments #offences
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Road
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 safety is really essential because these
days
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day
 number of vehicles have been increased and
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 is the reason of accidents on roads.It is suggested by some individuals that hard punishment should be given to those people who violates traffic rules
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I agree with the statement and my viewpoints will be elaborated on
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 issue in the aforementioned paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, It is seen in all the developed and developing countries that number of cars have been
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increasing
 rapidly and
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 has given the birth to traffic congestion and
road
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 insecurity. These days youngsters
imitiate
reproduce someone's behavior or looks
imitate
initiated
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fiestas'
 and
drive
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 rashly on roads which results in
road
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 accidents so in order to solve
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 problem
government
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 should cancel the driving license of persons who
drive
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 carelessly.
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, some people drink and
drive
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 which is really dangerous
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For instance
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, a survey was conducted in India and its result was that fifty percent accidents occur on roads because people were intoxicated
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 So
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 should put those
person
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people
persons
 in jail who drink and
drive
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 on roads. People should be heavily penalized by
government
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 for breaking traffic rules and regulations and harsh punishment should be given to those people. To recapitulate
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would like to write that it is the prime duty of
government
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 to ensure the
road
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saftey
the state of being certain that adverse effects will not be caused by some agent under defined conditions
safety
 so, strict rules and regulations should be made by
government
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 in order to avoid
road
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 accidents.
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