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Some people argue that we should do research into our family history. Others agree with the view that we should focus on the present and future generations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There has been an argument about whether we should discover and survey family background or stay focused on the present. In
this
 essay, I shall display both perspectives and conclude with my opinion.
To begin
 with, Studying deeply about our ancestors' history can enhance the comprehension of our past culture and develop new technology. There has been an enormous number of influential groups, and the offsprings and the younger generations inherit their legacy, One of the famous Japanese family,
for instance
, has owned various lucrative businesses and great wealth because of them. In fact, they mandatory to continue the plans which be left for the
next
 generations over and over.
Hence
, the inherited taught to be patient like what their ancestors did.
Also
, their working style is limited or adapted from the old ones.
Therefore learning
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Therefore, learning
 the events that took place in the past can improve and be used in our current scenario.
On the other hand
, unfortunately, some people have not willed from the past. Taking from my experience, I don't find any interesting stories about my precious family as my parents always teach us to focus on what you do, which leads you to success in the future and adapting to the modern society. Due to the changes in which frequency occurred, the elderly's stories are limited in certain circumstances.
Therefore
, we should move forward to the future than look back. To conclude, it depends on how the historical works and benefits us in nowadays.
Therefore some
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Therefore, some
 people can receive beneficial effects from the past, some, who don't have the inherited things still can success in their life.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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