Doctors in many countries believe that people are not getting enough exercise. What might be causing this lack of exercise? What can be done to address the issue?

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Over a span of almost a century, a
sky rocketing
propels bright light high in the sky, or used to propel a lifesaving line or harpoon
skyrocketing
number of 29 million vehicles established their way into the constantly evolving and pace-oriented modern lifestyle of people. It is considered by some that with
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extraordinary and wonderful advancement, our focus needs to be shifted towards the type of vehicle we use and usage of cars should be reduced. I totally agree with
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view point
a mental position from which things are viewed
viewpoint
. Certainly, a major population wouldn't be willing to give up their car
ownership
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owing to the reason that it is the best tool for carrying out their day to day activities and
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
their job responsibilities within the time
boundations
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they have been
grappled
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grappling
under.
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, cars give them freedom to cover long distances. They could carry their personal stuff with them and be granted with the utmost privacy they need.
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, I believe that car
ownership
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will push us even
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towards the sedentary and toxic lifestyle that they are currently living in.
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, it is a required transport these days, we need to draw our attention towards its harmful effects on mother nature and start considering it more as a luxury. After all, it was designed for human and by human and was once a luxury itself. Air pollution is a serious issue we are dealing with and emission of CO2 by cars needs to be controlled to solve that issue.
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, while being pulled away from cars, we may be driven towards physical
exercise namely
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exercise, namely
, walking
,
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,
riding
bicycle
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bicycles
for
daily commute
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a daily commute
, buying groceries etc. Even taking a train or bus would require more physical effort, which will eventually make us fit.
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, mitigating car use and
ownership
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can be rejuvenating for our brain and enable us to work with passion.
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is not only essential for own personal and professional goals but
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for the economy. To sum up, our economy needs more healthy and energetic people to run efficiently and
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only possible through a controlled use and
ownership
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of cars.
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, it is clear that cars cannot be completely banned from being operated owing to the dependency, there still can be some restrictions imposed on its utilization.
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