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Nowadays more and more people choose living separately from their families. What are its causes and consequences?

#people #families #consequences
There is no denying that in
this
 day and age more
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in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
 more people prefer living in their own apartments
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in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
 being far away from the families. Can it relate to independence
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in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
 maturity or it destroys family values? What are its causes and consequences? The following essay takes a look at both sides of the phenomenon. On the one hand, in a modern world each person chases freedom
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in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
 self-reliance. We have to realize ourselves
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in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
 only living alone can help to get one's head around.
Besides
, being alone, a person can be a little bit more productive and spend more time
to reflect
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reflecting
 on his or her actions. What’s more, only living separately man
grow
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grows
 into
aduct
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a duct
 one.
On the other hand
, human as a biological species cannot exist without company or community. We all need people around us and our family, especially parents, is those only ones, who loves us unconditionally
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in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
 it is strongly important to appreciate them.
In addition
, living together makes people corporate
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in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
 discuss the
problemes
a state of difficulty that needs to be resolved
problems
 with each other.
WIthout
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Without
 any feedback
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in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
 reaction
on
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to
 their behaviour person will not become the best version of yourself. To elucidate, I should say that there is no "right way" to live your life. Everyone of us makes your own choices and decisions. Living separately is
wonderful way
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a wonderful way
 to get the feel of freedom an learn to take responsibility for your actions. But completely forgetting the family and relative does not lead to a happy life.
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