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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of the society. Others, however, believe that the school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give own opinion.

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Man is a social being and no one can exist as an island. While some people hold the view that parents have the responsibility to teach their children to become a good member of the society, others feel that the
school
 is the best place to learn social values. In my opinion, both the parents and the teachers have an indispensable
role
 in shaping the
character
 of their children.
Firstly
, parents are the primary teachers and home is the
first
school
 where the personality development of children is initiated. From birth to preschool children are under the sole custody of their parents. They imitate the actions of their parents and for
this
 reason it is important for parents to become a good
role
 model for their children. Parents are the best people to teach them the concept of good and bad. When they are taught to make
this
 distinction from a young age, they are unlikely to go astray when they grow up.
However
, parents are not the only influence on children. Teachers at
school
 have an equally important
role
 to play in the formation of their
character
. The
school
 is essentially a microcosm of the universe. Here the children get to interact with other children of different
character
, personality and family backgrounds.
This
 exposure that they get at
school
 plays a crucial
role
 in the formation of their parents. It is the duty of parents to instil in them the values of discipline and social commitment. To conclude, parents and teachers, both have an equally important
role
 in moulding the
character
 of children. In my opinion, their roles are complementary.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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