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In spite of this advance made in agriculture, many people around the world still hungry. Why is this case ? What can be done about this problem ?

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Nowadays
agriculture
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 is developing gradually with a new technology for increasing
food
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 production.
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, in many countries, people still lead to suffering from starvation. Many factors
such
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 as
poverty
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, climate change and war contribute to the state of hunger. One of the essential reasons why people don't have enough
food
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 certainly it is
poverty
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 which forced people sense of malnutrition. It is known that most people who suffer from hunger are from underdeveloped countries where they have no
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 as financial support, out of working and others. I think about solving
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 problem, it is unreal without government support. The government need to provide that
food
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 is always available for
poverty
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 people or in reasonable price. They need to create funds for supporting
poverty
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 people in order to help them find work and daily
food
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 consumption.
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 method can help prevent an increase in the number of people starving to death.
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,
food
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 resource deficiency in some countries is flooded, drought and hurricanes possibility. These natural phenomena
bring
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brings
 destructive consequences to buildings and facilities, but they
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 influence the farm animals and crops.
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, people are forced to starve that leads to epidemics and diseases. The best solution to
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 worrying problem is a protective systems introduction and reasonable technology used in
agriculture
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.
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, by involving governmental funds in creation of protective structures against natural disasters, farmers can avoid a harmful influence of these catastrophes.
This
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 way can avoid the increase of starvation in the world as well developing
agriculture
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. In conclusion,
poverty
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 is the most issue for creating starvation in the world, but it can be solved by government supporters
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 as keep up acceptable price and creating financial funds. Another solution directed for exploring new technologies in
agriculture
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 in order to defend from natural disaster.
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