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Some people prefer to live in hot climate while others love to live in countries with cold weather discuss both views and give your opinion

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With the advent of urbanisation, there is
rise
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a rise
 in
shifting
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the shifting
 of the population from one region to another due to which migration occurs on a global level. Some people argue that they want to live in cold countries and others concur that residing in warmer nations is a better idea. Both aspects have its own benefits as well as
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
 and the reasons for the same are given below
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 with, individuals would be more productive at work where temperature levels are low.
This
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 is because chilled environment plays an essential role in carrying out the specific tasks as there is no dehydration and
cosumption
the process of taking food into the body through the mouth (as by eating)
consumption
 of food is more which maintain the energy levels. On the top of that, one can engage
into
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in
 vigorous physical activities to become more efficient as there is less sweating.
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, there are
plethora
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a plethora
 of games which can be played on ice
such
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 as skiing.
On the other hand
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, Hot climate helps in regulating the metabolism of the body.
This
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, in result more outdoor activities
are preferred
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is preferred
 over the indoor.
Days
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The days
 are much longer than the nights and
hence
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 people can make best use of it. Several companies organise campaigns for summer tracking or climbing the hills which include different age group people. In my opinion,
although
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 both have its own pros and
cons but
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cons, but
 the most
relaxable
capable of being replaced
replaceable
 atmosphere is cold where one can bloom and experience life at its utmost.
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