while some people believe that government surveillance (such as closed circuit television and the use of speed cameras) is essential for individual to feel safe within a society, others feel it limits their freedom

The
government
surveillance
is a well-known concept. Even kings and queens from every kingdom had a somebody who was in charge to keep everything going
smooth
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smoothly
in their area.
For instance
, everybody had to pay money to the king, and they
did not be allow
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didn't allow
did not allow
weren't allowing
were not allowing
were not allowed
weren't allowed
haven't allowed
to say a bad work against him.
On the other hand
, the king’s army was protecting people and whole kingdom. We can see
similar concept
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a similar concept
similar concepts
in these days. We pay taxes to our
government
and our army keep a vigilance, our
government
provided
work opportunity
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a work opportunity
the work opportunity
to us and we can get a health care if we need to. I inclined to think the
government
surveillance
is essential to feel safe within a society. Of course, somebody could feel that speed cameras limit their freedom, but I think it is for our own safety. Cameras are extremely useful tools for police investigations as well. I would like to mention another positive side of the
government
surveillance
. I am from
different country
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a different country
, so I travel a lot and I am glad that the
government
do
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does
such
a brilliant job on our airports to protect us. On the other
side I
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side, I
can
also
agree with people who feel it limits their freedom. In my opinion, too much
government
surveillance
would be kind of scary sometimes. From my own experience, I was terribly upset when I was downloading one application to my phone and it asked me if I am giving a permission to give them access to my photos, camera, calls and messages. I learnt that the
government
could have a full access to our phones. In conclusion, follow the golden mean would the best solution. People could be happy for protection from our
government
, but they could not to let it be
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
close.
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