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The spread of multinational companies and the resulting increase of globalization produce positive effects to everyone. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people are of the viewpoint that there is a positive consequence for the people by not only expanding national as well as international organisation but
also
 the elevation of the globalisation. I strongly bolster the opinion. My inclination is justified with logical explanations. The strongest argument I shall put forward is the improvement in economy of developing as well as underdeveloped nations.
This
 is to say that it fulfils the job requirements. The host country aids the local companies of the nation;
also
 local companies get the benefit from the supplied raw materials and eventually they can find the global market for their products.
Moreover
, there has been
enlargement
Suggestion
enlarged
enlarging
 in the trade and business sector. The chief reason is the import-export amongst countries.
This
 ultimately enhances the international bond and relationship between the country's get even stronger than prior.
Furthermore
, another principal one is that advancement in quality of life.
For instance
, international product can be found in any nook and corner.
This
 makes the people similar in terms of food, clothes, gadgets, languages and even thoughts.
Consequently
, reduction of not only discrimination but
also
 criticisms among the inhabitant of the earth, which
finally
 makes the place more amiable. Apart from the lifestyle, level of labour has increased. They can receive more rights and income.
For example
, local industries provide low-wages; whereas, multinationals give privileges.
However
, a few others may counter agree and claim that there has been adverse impacts on agriculture.
This
 can backlash the production of goods in other parts of the country. To add to
this
, it
also
 generates the dispute between personal and professional life due to the differences in local time and global time. All in all, it can be eventually commented that
although
 there are impediments of globalization, advantages exceeds due to profit in the business section, trading and improvement in lifestyle of people.
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